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Sunday, March 27, 2011

Wistful Voyage





Reflections dance across the bay
Sparkling through the ice glass sea
Over waves aloft the mizzen
Casting back brilliant prisms

Tranquil solace well past twilight
Until her lustre fades to moonlight
A bittersweet farewell to land
To cerulean skies and diamond sands



Dedicated to my Great, Great Grandfather Frank Johnson,
English Poet and Author of Lashed To The Mizzen

FRANK JOHNSON, English born poet
September 2. 1810 - February 17, 1892
The Village Of Merrow

Re-posted for dVerse  July 21 2011
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29 comments:

  1. JL DodgeMarch 27, 2011 at 8:44 PM

    You take me away on a voyage each time I read your poem, I really love how you do that !
    Nice that you dedicated this to your Great,Great Grandfather....
    LOVELY
    JL&B

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  2. lorelyMarch 27, 2011 at 9:03 PM

    I am wistful reading it Helena...

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  3. FireblossomMarch 27, 2011 at 9:41 PM

    I like your pretty header, and the words about "something from nothing." :-)

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  4. Brian MillerMarch 27, 2011 at 9:47 PM

    ah...bitter sweet goodbyes aside the descriotions are delish...smiles.

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  5. Bethe77March 27, 2011 at 10:07 PM

    Very beautiful! I want to get lost in the beauty of it.
    Thank you for dropping by this day.
    Blessings

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  6. T F CarthickMarch 27, 2011 at 10:45 PM

    Produces a nice dreamy, nostalgic image in the mind. Very skillful use of words.

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  7. KrystalMarch 27, 2011 at 11:53 PM

    Very Enchanting! once again i am whisked away in a dream with your words. Everything about your blog is like a mysterious yet wonderful dream.

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  8. AnonymousMarch 28, 2011 at 12:29 AM

    really lovely.

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  9. AMMarch 28, 2011 at 1:17 AM

    beautiful.. you just have a way to connect through your writing.

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  10. ArtiMarch 30, 2011 at 2:52 AM

    This is lovely! You certainly create magic with your words :)

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  11. Susie SwansonMarch 31, 2011 at 6:09 PM

    A very nostalgic image. I love it. Yes magic it is and so much talent.. Susie

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  12. AllendaMarch 31, 2011 at 6:56 PM

    I must admit I had to look up mizzen to find out it is a sail on a boat. I'd say your great, great grandfather seems to have a hand in the eloquence and essence of this verse. Could you feel him near, my dear?

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  13. Brian MillerJuly 21, 2011 at 10:58 PM

    the last lines of each stanza are the highlights for me...your creativity shines in those two lines...while opening in beauty it is familiar, maybe that works but i might kick it up a notch...

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  14. AnonymousJuly 22, 2011 at 5:55 AM

    (your blog page is stunning)

    Your seafaring metaphors flow through this poem with ease, setting a farewell to the currents with beauty and grace.

    I read all poetry out loud because the voice gives the words depth and often I find new little nuances that escape the voice in my head. In doing so, I found that the double spacing of the presentation, though lovely, forced exaggerated pauses in thought, more than what a normal line break would do. The blend of free verse, rhyme and near-rhyme works for you here. I like finding bits of rhyme in free verse if it fits the theme in an unforced effect.

    Truly lovely. Thank you for offering this poem for dVerse crit night. I enjoyed reviewing your work.

    Beth

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  15. ScarletJuly 22, 2011 at 8:47 AM

    A lovely poem for me ~

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  16. Helena WhiteJuly 22, 2011 at 4:09 PM

    Thanks for your kind words Brian. However, I'm not sure I understand what you mean by...while opening in beauty it is familiar, maybe that works but I might kick it up a notch...

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  17. Helena WhiteJuly 22, 2011 at 4:11 PM

    Beth,

    Thank you so much for your kind comments on my blog ~ I will take your suggestion and change the spacing ~ It’s wonderful to get advice! ~ So nice to meet you...

    ♥ ஆ ~.^

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  18. Helena WhiteJuly 22, 2011 at 4:12 PM

    Heaven, always look forward to your visits!!! Smiles!

    ♥ ஆ ~.^

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  19. BeachannyJuly 22, 2011 at 5:57 PM

    Quite a tribute to your grandfather - a rhyme for a poet and employing a word from his title to harken back to it.

    The overall form makes a good metaphor for the end of life and dying. I see the sail casting nets of light over all who knew him and watching as he sails away and all this with overtones of a Viking funeral. Very beautiful. Gay

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  20. Helena WhiteJuly 22, 2011 at 9:05 PM

    Oh my, I like your interpretation of my poem...When I wrote this,I could sense my G G Grandfathers spirit encouraging me. I say this because the words manifested quite effortlessly. Plus I had a beautiful sense of calm while writing this piece. I always appreciate your comments Gay, Thank you so much...

    ♥ ஆ ~.^

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  21. Marbles in My PocketSeptember 1, 2011 at 7:03 AM

    A wonderful poem; very alive and visual. I enjoyed reading it very much.

    My slam #9 entry: http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/08/31/dearest-john-2/

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  22. IsadoraSeptember 2, 2011 at 3:20 PM

    "Wistful Voyage" - the title engulfed me and I was lost in heaven. Beautiful ...
    Namaste,
    Isadora

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  23. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis HallSeptember 2, 2011 at 4:53 PM

    very dreamy piece.

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  24. AnonymousSeptember 2, 2011 at 11:04 PM

    your poem reflected the photo so beautifully :)

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  25. AnonymousSeptember 3, 2011 at 9:20 AM

    I like it very much! :) Thanks for sharing!

    Here is my offering: http://kweschn.wordpress.com/2011/09/03/there-she-stands/

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  26. Ann LeFloreSeptember 4, 2011 at 10:54 PM

    Such a lovely way to express this photo. I love your poem

    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/05/the-milky-seas/

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  27. Ginny BrannanSeptember 6, 2011 at 9:17 PM

    Lovely poem,lovely tribute!

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  28. HelenaSeptember 8, 2011 at 5:19 PM

    You've just made me want to embrace the ocean! This is a wonderful dedication as well.

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  29. e.a.s. demersSeptember 13, 2011 at 1:28 AM

    Nice take on the prompt! And a wonderful dedication :-)

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